Before I even look over this, I am gonna need you to increase that font size. Between the color, and the size, reading it hurts my eyes.

Resized it up I hope that is better.

Sorry added a another tech before my tech pack purchase was confirmed.

Ayane wrote:

The flower eye patch isn't a permanent fixture to her general appearance of her Resurreccion this eye patch is a little something that is used to suppress her normal spiritual pressure to that of 20% of its original state. This is to send her opponents into a false sense of security. Besides suppressing her spiritual pressure it also locks 15% of her initial spiritual energy making sure she has a spiritual energy in case she over does it, giving herself a little back up. This flower patch can be removed during a battle it only takes one post to do but when removing it she cannot use any techniques nor cero's during this post.

Her sword though looking completely normal to the general eye is more complex then one would think. The sword is a incubator of sorts that will generate pollen within, to feed it so it can make the pollen it absorbs reishi particles around Ayane. The pollen upon the blade releases every time to moves the blade. Once airborn the pollen turns into freely loose petals, though pollen can fall off the blade it so quickly regenerating one would never know if there is no pollen left on the blade.

If you look upon her left arm you see a gauntlet when dealing with gauntlet one would aspect them to be defensively set up for use. Ayane's gauntlet is not used for that reason, her gauntlet cover her left arm and reaches up to her mid upper arm bypassing her elbow. The gauntlet is black in color and has a range of motion that of her regular arm so there is no motion lost. Unlike her sword that creates pollen her gauntlet traps pollen and manifest it within it. Panels run up and down her arms using her spiritual energy she can open up these panels and release a massive amount of petals into the air.

That eyepatch is a no.

Ayane wrote:

Pollen Properties
Chemically wise

The pollen is similar in molecular structure of that of LSD. Giving the pollen a drug based property, the drug is normally used to help create hallucinations and visions, it is also addictive. Ayane's body is normally once transformed covered it this and spawns it out continuously, as a incubator the pollen itself doesn't effect her at all. Once inhaled the drugs addictive properties starts slowly increase making the person want to get closer to Ayane not knowing they want to absorb more of the drug based pollen.

The pollen blocks serotonin from the brain like LSD. Serotonin, a neurotransmitter, is in charge of regulating mood, muscle contraction, and other cognitive functions. The reason why the pollen blocks serotonin is because of their structural similarity, the pollen is mistaken to be serotonin and is then sent to the synaptic cleft instead of serotonin. And like many other hallucinogenics, the pollen has a substituted indole ring in its molecular structure, which contributes to its hallucinogenic effects. There are many perceptual changes altering the cognitive and visual sensory systems, as well as changed in the sense of time, body-image, and ego.

The pollen like LSD is a somewhat stable organic molecule, like other molecules with similar structures.The main factors to be concerned with are moisture due to chemical reactions in the presence of moisture, oxygen, light, and temperature. So to weaken the bond of the drug based pollen one would need to use a water based move to wash away the pollen hallucinate.

The pollen is weaker then what LSD is normally as LSD is usually in a liquid based form as the pollen is in a powder based form making it air born. So using water would basically wash away the pollen's effectiveness. But like LSD once taking orally it dissolves right into the blood stream and once in the blood stream will then works way into the person brain.

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It should be noted Ayane's main powers are illusions, therefore even if someone is not affected by the pollen, they are still subjected to Ayane's tricks. As mentioned before it just makes it more potent. Every spell Ayane uses can be broken but one would need a certain level in Reiastu Skill to be able to break through it even a Master Level may have difficulty breaking some of Ayane's stronger skills.

Scrap this bit as well. The fact that the pollen basically substitutes a drug makes it way too obnoxious, since, as you said, the affected parties are going to just walk up to Ayane and ask for more. That's a no. It crosses over into godmodding via player control. The pollen will simply act as a primer for the illusions and nothing more. They go to the brain, and rest there. The end.

Ayane wrote:

Naмє : Rose Mist Cero
Dєscrιpтιon : Opening her gauntlet Ayane and send out a blast of white petals at her opponent causing temporary blindness, this petals will come before hand and shortly afterwords she shot a cero out from her same hand. Shortly meaning two seconds later. The petals that are sent out travel at a faster speed then the cero meaning the opponent will get by the petals before the cero. This cero does not count towards the normal cero count.
Prєparaтιon Tιмє : N/A
Duraтιon : Instant
Cooldoωn : 2 posts

It will follow the rules of Cero. Including prep time and counting towards CD rate.

Ayane wrote:

Naмє : Splinter
Dєscrιpтιon : Taking her sword Ayane stabs the ground or in some cases the air underneath her feet. Doing this she releases the pollen within her sword unlike usual channeling her spiritual energy and reishi towards the tip a blast of white light shots out. Then white wooden shards shaped like spears the start bursting out of the ground / air. The spears are that of the same thickness of that of a iron pipe. The spears will continue to sprout out covering a total area of 30 feet around Ayane in all directions. The spears would continue to grow out of previous spears for a extended time creating a appearance that of a dense thorn bush. This spears are intended to not only create a difficult movable field but as well as possibly impaling upon who are within it.
Prєparaтιon Tιмє : 1
Duraтιon : Once created it stays there it doesn't disappear after a certain amount of time. But the spears stop growing after 3 posts.
Cooldoωn : 10 posts starting after 3 post duration.

Need measurements on this. How long are these spikes?

Ayane wrote:

Naмє : Blossoming Slash
Dєscrιpтιon : Using speed and strength Ayane slashes the air in front of her sending a shockwave like air force to the direction of her intended target. The pollen will loosen along her blade which would make it fall off and it would then travel along with the slash in the air she made. The pollen would then become petals before reaching the target. The amount of pollen that would travel with the slash would be a staggering 100,000 particles which in turn would make that many petals. Once the slash reaches target the force behind it would equal that of what the blades original strength would be if it really hit.
Prєparaтιon Tιмє : N/A
Duraтιon : 0 though the petals would stay there as they have a infinite duration.
Cooldoωn : 4 posts

So this is concussive force here? For an attack like this, there will need to be a 1 post prep time. Also...how does one unit of pollen equate to one petal?

Ayane wrote:

Naмє : Petal Booster
Dєscrιpтιon : Point her gauntlet in any direction she will open up the panels fully which creates a over whelming amount of petals being released at great pressure and force using this she can change the directions the are sent out and creates a booster pack of them. Using this skill she can travel great speeds in seconds.

1 st her speed would be that of the level of master, 2 nd post speed of a Expert, and 3 rd post average. The speed weakens the longer it runs. With this skill she could match someone with HSM in master level rather easily for a short time.
Prєparaтιon Tιмє : N/A
Duraтιon : 3 posts
Cooldoωn : 6 posts

This is not allowed as it voids mastery levels and augmentations.


As a side note why does the pollen turn into petals? That isn't listed anywhere as a power or as a power.

As for your illusions. ALL of them are lacking information relating to how they are triggered. You cannot just hit someone with an illusion. I need to see something there that states how you initiate the illusion.

Vai'el wrote:

That eyepatch is a no.

Alright removed it.

Vai'el wrote:

Scrap this bit as well. The fact that the pollen basically substitutes a drug makes it way too obnoxious, since, as you said, the affected parties are going to just walk up to Ayane and ask for more. That's a no. It crosses over into godmodding via player control. The pollen will simply act as a primer for the illusions and nothing more. They go to the brain, and rest there. The end.

I removed the one part but I substituted the fact that the pollen primer to the pollen is a drug.  I like this concept and I am sorry but I will not remove the section in the regards to chemistry wise since I was asked by another mod to put it in originally.

Vai'el wrote:

It will follow the rules of Cero. Including prep time and counting towards CD rate.

Fixed it.

Vai'el wrote:

Need measurements on this. How long are these spikes?

Added.

Vai'el wrote:

So this is concussive force here? For an attack like this, there will need to be a 1 post prep time. Also...how does one unit of pollen equate to one petal?

That is correct so I added a 1 post prep like u said.

Vai'el wrote:

This is not allowed as it voids mastery levels and augmentations.

Understandable so I replaced it with a different tech idea.

Vai'el wrote:

As a side note why does the pollen turn into petals? That isn't listed anywhere as a power or as a power.

Firstly I added it in to the power and why you ask cause air born hallucinating pollen seemed a little OP in my opinion so I made it that only the pollen mainly on the blade is poisonous.  

Vai'el wrote:

As for your illusions. ALL of them are lacking information relating to how they are triggered. You cannot just hit someone with an illusion. I need to see something there that states how you initiate the illusion.

I assume you mean like a pre warning like giving the opponent a slight advanced warning a illusion is coming if so I add that in.

With all that editing I think its done I hope your pleased.